Dear Clarla,
It is a pleasure to write to you. I am so sorry for not coming to your office after school .I'm also sorry for not helping you move your stuff, being mad at you and screaming at you. I wanted to go for a haircut then I changed my mind when we were nearly there. I asked my mum If she could drop me off but she said no because we were almost there. It smelled like chewed bubble gum. After my haircut I begged my mum to go to the school she took me to and I ran to the room and I got your letter.
Thank you for talking to me whenever I needed help. And me and Jeff are friends. He came to my house to pick me up to walk to colleen birthday. I Got changed 6 times. I made a hold in my pants like Jeff.
I went to Colleen’s birthday party. When we got to Colleen's house we rang the doorbell and I heard the girls scream . Oooo presents what is it Colleen said I almost said what it was but Jeff elbowed me so I stooped and didn't tell her then I started to sing happy birthday then Jeff elbowed me again. It was fun we played games .And my team won most of the games.I made a new friend. The dog's name is chicken. When collen read her letter I put love Bradley in her letter and everyone laughed but then this girl Karen told them to stop and when we sang happy birthday I got the words mixed up and then I was the only one singing but we had a laugh. I came in first place and we also got points when we played the games. We did a 3 legged race. I was with Jeff because Mrs. Fairygold said that boys can not be tied with girls.
I really hope you write back to me. I really do miss you.
-Bradley Chalkers
Last seat, Last row
Redhill school
Mrs ebell class
Room 12
things started to disspear
The TV is still on. Dad walks in searching for the remote. AHHHH Jack and Betty get down here. What it is is dad jack said in a disturbing voice. Where's the remote. Ugh, why are you asking Me? because you were the last one here watching that stupid baby show. No, I didn't. Yes, you did. Mum walks in. Where my sunglasses. I don’t know where you did you put it last. It was in my room. Mum and dad blame me. It's always you.” What no it is not me. Betty and Jack go to their room. Mum dad where my phone. Betty, why you asking me?. Why don’t you go and ask your borther maybe he knows where It Is. What It not be I promise. Ohh your promise is nothing. Ring Ring Ring. Mun Dad did you hear that. Yeah, what is that. Betty goes outside. I found something.What is it Mum said. it my phone and your remote and the sunglasses. Betty goes and gets it. Here. MUM & DAD feel bad and send Jack to come and get some takeaways. THE END. ...
I love your letter to Carla. You sound just like Bradley. I like all the connections you have made to the text. I love this compound sentence with the comma to join two different ideas... "I'm also sorry for not helping you move your stuff, being mad at you and screaming at you."
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