Suddenly darkness enveloped the room. I was scared, the cat came in my room. It was meowing. So I tried to turn on the light but it couldn’t turn on. So I went to my mum and dad room but no one was there. I tried to go out to the kitchen but it was too hard to see. I went to the sitting room and tried to open it but then I heard my mum voice saying, Emily, Emily, are you there." I followed the voice and said "hello mum."
Are we there yet
Are we there yet “Mumm are we there yet,” I said in a bored voice. “No we just have 8-9 hours,” mum said. “Uhh we left at nine in the morning,” I said IN angrily, voice fixing the phone. “where are we going?” I asked. “We are going to Paris to see grandam. “What, that is going to take forever. “ No I am sure it's going to take just a little bit,” mum said in a tired voice. “Mum jack keeps kicking me. “Jack don’t kick your sister. “I am just so bored I have nothing to do. 2 minutes later “Mum, are we there yet? I asked for the 2 time . “No we only have 5 more hours. 3 minutes later “Are we in Paris now mum. “ just 2 more hours till we get to grandam. “Ugh it's so hot in here I'm going to die iN here. “Just wind your window down. “ no mum , I don't want the window down,'' Jack said. “No,I want the window down. “Oh will yours be too quiet for ones mum
You are working hard at making sure you have used full stops and commas when you need to separate new ideas. Good to see the speech marls when someone is talking.
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